Talni
Loner 
[M:0][A:10]
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Post by Talni on Jan 15, 2012 23:28:53 GMT -5
OOC Information
OOC Name: KitsuneProphet
Name you go by in the cbox/site KitsuneProphet
Link to Previous Character: None
Link to last accepted character None
General
Name: Talni
Alias: No other name, just Talni. She gets grumpy if any one calls her anything else.
Species: Lyxxus
Gender: Female
Age: Three years old.
Pack: Loner
Rank: n/a
Physical
Height: 17 inches.
Weight: 29 pounds.
Appearance: Talni has crimson fur spreading thickly across her back, with the line of her spine being a rusty yet vivid scarlet. The color fades as it continues down to her belly, eventually turning to an ivory hue on the fur down her neck and under her belly. Talni's muzzle is streaked with a faded red that continues up and shades the fur around her stony sea green eyes. Her three long tails are tipped with the ivory color on her belly, as are her long, elegant ears.
Talni graces the forest with her light, springy steps, yet also seems to make it an ominous place as her immense silence keeps her in a mysterious aura. Her lithe body can squeeze through even the tightest spaces with ease, as if her shiny pelt is coated in a layer of oil to help her ease through tiny fissures. Her gaze darts around, scanning her surroundings until she is sure there is no danger. She keeps her head lowered to the ground to let her sensitive nose help her navigate unknown territories that she travels through.
Other: Talni's ears and tails are longer than average for a lyxxus her size.
Mental
Strengths: Talni is excellent at scenting as well as tracking, as her light steps and acute sense of smell give her advantages. She has perseverance and will not stop any mission until she deems it impossible or until it is completed. She has high standards for herself and others, and usually meets hers, yet is disappointed when others do not live up to her expectations. Talni is courageous and leaps into danger right after analyzing it, whether she thinks the situation is good or bad. She will take on the role of a leader if nobody else will, and is self reliant for most things.
Weaknesses: Talni is terrified of swimming. The mere aspect of it makes her legs tremble and whiskers quiver, her tail ducking between her legs. It will take serious urging to get her to swim even small distances. Talni is snappy if another wolf portrays stupidity or immaturity, causing the victims, and sometimes witnesses, of her outbursts to shy away from her. Talni will go ballistic if the behavior continues for an extended period of time and will sometimes attack whomever was grating on her nerves. Talni can be rather untrusting, due to betrayals of a previous friends. She holds grudges on situation and doesn't have much mental elasticity, and these traits make it hard for her to repair friendships that have faltered.
Personality: Talni is serious, she tries to get to work as quickly as possible. She enjoys adventure and the feeling of being wild and free, and will not allow herself to be pushed around by others--a behavior that can cause Talni to hold a grudge. At times, her eyes glint with rebellion at even a hint that someone is trying to control her, yet she has the intelligence to know when to fight back or not in these circumstances. She dislikes wolves that goof off in dire situations, or just wolves that goof off in general, and is mainly only friends with wolves that respect her and aren't slowing her down. She often has a tough exterior, but inside, she's just waiting for someone to try hard enough to get to know her. Talni can sometimes appear cold and uncaring even if she's in emotional despair. She has learned to create a believable facade.
History: Talni grew up in a small pack. Her father, the omega of the pack, had been killed by another pack in a battle. The pack leader told everyone to flee, and Talni did so with another member of her pack. When Talni was nearing two and a half years, the other member ran away without her along a dangerous path that Talni knew she wouldn't survive alone. Since then, she has walked through the world alone. She doesn't know what ever happened to her mother, as she shielded her eyes and ran. Each time she remembers how she turned tail and fled, Talni vows again and again to never run in the face of danger. She killed another loner in a brief fight for a carcass, and has come across other battles as well, though none have left permanent marks on her.
Talni has tried on several occasions to get into different packs, and is rejected each time either due to a mistrustful alpha, or too many members in the pack already. She continued on from there, always searching.
Other: Talni is extremely swift.
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Post by Somatra on Jan 16, 2012 12:09:29 GMT -5
Hello there and welcome to the world of Wonderwhy! I get to be the staff member in charge of reviewing your bio (hoorays for that) and hopefully we can get you out there and having fun sooner then later. As your lyxxus is three she would technically have three tails, one for each year.  Just a bit tricky to understand, perhaps try something to the effect of "She has perseverance and will not stop any mission until she had deemed it impossible or until she has completed it." Other then that just elaborate a bit more on her how her weaknesses affect her in her Personality. Your bio was a enjoyable read and I see you put thought into your char. After you have made those changes let me know by a quick reply to this thread and I will see if you are ready for action. Good luck, Somatra
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Talni
Loner
[M:0][A:10]
Posts: 6
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Post by Talni on Jan 16, 2012 12:42:25 GMT -5
Fixed it Does this work? Thank you for reviewing it so quickly. |
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Post by Somatra on Jan 16, 2012 12:48:38 GMT -5
Righto, good to go!
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