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[Swalleena]

General
Name: Swalleena
Alias: None
Species: Whisp (LE)
Gender: Female
Age: 6
Pack: Loner
Rank: n/a

Physical
Height: 48"
Weight:40 lbs
Appearance: Swalleena is a tall and graceful Whisp with soft white fur. She has faint undertones of bruised violet purple that are only visible in the shadows of her fur. She has the distinct marking of said purple shade of swirls entwined over the fur on her left eye. Her eyes are an enchanting shade of emerald green that have bright higlights of gold flecks in them. Swalleena`s movements appear ghostly and unsettling to many who watch her. Her voice is as soft as her appearance but certainly holds a noble ring to it. Like a light blanket it is caressing yet airy.
Other: She physically appears very breakable and delicate due to her height and thinner limbs.

Mental
Strengths:

Diplomacy: Swalleena has had to learn a great deal of the methods of diplomacy to survive, and is fluent in the means of preventing a fight.

Beauty: Swalleena possesses a regal and unearthly beauty that may strike others as almost haunting. She is unaware of this trait which enhances the effect and leaves the impression of innocence despite her troubled past experience. This same beauty attracts others and permits her to unconsciously make many friends.

Compassion: Swalleena has a lot of compassion for those in times of trouble, and she has listened to many a sad and despairing story. She may not posses the ability to heal physical wounds, but she possesses the gift to heal their deeper and more hurtful counter parts; the psychological scars.

Ability: As she can turn into smoke Swalleena is excellent at gathering information and spying. This makes her a useful messenger and informant. Her white wings also allow her to cover a great distance when traveling.

Weaknesses:

Pent up emotions: Swalleena has learnt to push her needs and feelings out of the way time and time again. They have built up deep inside her and threaten to explode. Though this would mean her destruction rather then that of others.

Beauty: Her beauty is also a flaw as it attracts dangerous eyes and leaves her vulnerable as a prey to their attentions.

Lack of fighting skills: She was not raised to fight and cannot physical defend herself in a fight. Therefor she can also not physically defend others either.
Personality: As a whisp Swalleena appears to be very soft and easy to control. She is only that by appearance as her interior is hardened to a harsher life. Her words are usually reserved and she thinks with the head and heart of a noble wolf, others first and foremost. The innate goodness in her is a constant burning flame, which has served not only as a beacon for her self, but for others as well. With firm beliefs she rules her life in a strict and conventional fashion, leaving only room for compassion for the individuals which she believes require her help. Her pride is remarkable and also a danger, and she will state her opinion unwaveringly unless feeling threatened. Due to her past she remains subservient to larger males and speaks little in their presence.

History: Swalleena was born as the only pup to two Whisp rulers and thereby the sole heiress to a very noble and prosperous pack. One would assume her life would consequentially be easy and pampered; but it was not. With great privilege came greater responsibility and as a female Swalleena was raised to be the perfect mate and a dutiful female, serving everyone before her self. This was not a bad life as she enjoyed serving others and working for the people and so she followed her lessons and grooming without complaint.

On her fourth birthday, as was customary, she was to be joined with a whisp whom was the alpha's son of a neighboring pack. This union would join together two powerful packs and therefor Swalleena learned to adopt highly diplomatic methods of conversation. She had not layed eyes on her future and preordained mate, but all the same she looked froward to her future and was content with her pack's decision. It was her duty and so she would perform it to the best of her abilities.

However, all took a turn for the worse on that day as she was taken from the care of her guardians and whisked away into the towering and foreboding mountains. Without means to defend her self she was left with no option but to comply. It was here that she first came into contact with the hardships of life. A pack had been living deep within the caverns of the mountains, and it was not hard to tell that they had once been prosperous. However, they were now a dying pack, as sickness and famine had taken hold on them and desperation, fear and anger had taken hold of their hearts. The Alpha had lost his mate of several years and their two sons to the sickness, and was desperate to re-instill faith into his pack. It was his distorted belief that he should take a new mate and create new heirs. As a whisp he required another whisp to keep the bloodline pure and so Swalleena was chosen, despite the notable difference in their age.

Swalleena, being good of nature and sympathetic, tried to reason with the Alpha, but it was not only the leader that was disillusioned, but the pack in it entity as well. So against her will Swalleena was forced into a mate relation with the aging alpha. For the next year she was submitted to numerous attempts at creating a heir, and it was with success that she brought into the dying pack a male heir. Despite her unnecessarily cruel circumstances she fought to raise the pup, but within that same year it died, with it his sire. And with them the pack fell apart and Swalleena was left to roam free.

As duty would have it she returned to her original pack, but instead of being greeted with warmth, sympathy and love she was greeted with disgust and repulsion. Blamed for the Alpha's actions it was instilled upon her that it was her fault for enticing the leader and that she had forsaken her pack and duty. Cast out she had no choice but to join errant travelers for meager protection. The rough life did not rob her of her compassion for the vulnerable, but it stole her ability to open her self up to males. The memories of the month spent serving the Alpha are stored away deep in the confines of her mind and only surface but for brief moments, as if they are living beings requiring air. Swalleena now must seek out a pack with which to live less she too fade away...
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[ARTEMIS!]

Whisp - APPROVED AUDITION: pm your bio and an rp sample of the character to Sun

Please PM this to Sun before posting here.

[sunchaser109]

Character audition has been approved.

Now waiting for profile approval, will post what needs to be edited/changed before final approval can be reached ^___^

[sunchaser109]

please change what i asked you to change in pm ^__^ then ill look it over agian

[Swalleena]

ok sunny, I think I have changed what you asked, i.e. her eye color and the paragraph on her abilities under strengths. Hopefully that should do her for those corrections, though as I read over it I realize I must have been tired when I wrote it, haha.

[Keinvarii]

I don't know if this is politically correct or not, but just so it doesn't get lost in the sea then I am writing this to bump it, not to get it looked at.

[Chess]

Sun has asked me to look over the profile once more please fix the following:

has but faint undertones

Change to: faint undertones, placing but in there may sound cool but is not grammatical correct.

Swalleena moves like a ghost; silent and unearthly in rather unsettling, graceful and fluid movements.

Change to: This sentence really doesn't make sense. There are a ton of adjectives in one sentence to describe movement. You could say her movements are ghostly and unsettling to many who watch her...or something like that, it just seems like over kill right now.

It falls over others like a hypnotizing blanket that is soft, caressing but airy.

Change to: blanket that is soft, and airy and caresses so and so or something

Her form appears very breakable and delicate.

Wolves have bodies, not forms unless you are describing her smoke "form" then it needs to be specified.

Swalleena possesses a regal and unearthly beauty that strikes other as almost haunting.

Change to: strikes others

She is unaware of this trait which enhances the effect and leaves the impression of innocence despite her trouble experience.

Change to: despite her troubled past/experience

her interior is hardened to a harsher life. Her words are usually reserved and she thinks with the head of a noble, others first and foremost and her needs last.

Change to: firstly..I would say she thinks with the head and heart of a noble wolf, others first and foremost...(Because if you leave it at just noble..they were some of the last to think of others. Specification is key)

[Swalleena]

I just wanted to say that I have changed what you have suggested (it is always excellent to have someone read over your work as I find I miss a lot if I don't). In addition, I wanted to give a big thank you to you (Chess) and Sun for taking the time to look over her bio and apologize for being a pest as I have reviewed what I have been asking of you both in the cbox and realized that it was unnecessary pestering. Appreciate the work you both put in to this site and am glad to have you guys as mod/gmod.
Somatra

[sunchaser109]

Accepted thank you ^_^