Loki- Lumen

[loki]

OOC Information
OOC Name:Loki
Link to Previous Character: None yet ^^

General
Name: Loki
Alias: Trickster
Species: Lumen
Gender: Female
Age: 55
Pack: Loner
Rank: n/a

Physical
Height: 40 inches tall
Weight: 25 pounds
Appearance: Loki is a thin and agile wolf, and her body is made of packed sinewy muscle, built for both speed and endurance. Despite her ability to manipulate the light, she prefers to remain ebony in color, it matches her personality and creates a much more intimidating appearance. Her voice is light with a soprano like quality but can turn dark in a flash if she has been angered. Her greatest weapons are her words and she utilizes them to her full advantage, she speaks in eloquent phrases and has seduced both young and old with her carefully calculated words. She moves silently, and she had perfected the art of the stalk and can move without a sound for long periods of time, she had remarkable endurance and when focused, she can survive without food or drink for several days, especially in territories she's familiar in. Very few can match her for stamina.
Other: Anything else of interest that you might have missed.

Mental
Strengths:
Speed,
Endurance,
Cunning
Deception
Lies
No concept of self preservation
Weaknesses:
Lack of strength
Lack of loyalty
Lack of honesty
Lack of overall power
At times pushes herself to far
Susceptability to elemental powers.
Personality: Loki is a bitter and tormented soul. She thrives on the pains, torments and miseries of those around her. She is forever the trickster, and she wears the nickname with pride. Deceitful and angry she has led more than her fair share of wolves to their deaths by twisting her words into great elaborate tales. She hadn't always been so cold hearted as a child she had been playful and curious and full of amazement at her own abilities and the world around her, but as she grew older her soul grew darker, as did the colors of her coat, turning darker and darker until the ebony color you see today stands dominant. A few who knew her then claim that the child she had been is lost somewhere deep within Loki's heart but at that Loki turns her head to the heavens and bellows out a laugh, as she chooses another victim.
History: Loki was born with the simple name of Eve. She like the rest of the pups were taught the ways of the Lumen, colorful, wonderful stories rich with their heritage and there ability to grant wishes. This had always bored Eve, but the stories of the wishes going awry and the sadness and misery befalling those who had wished big and had ended up with nothing, she loved. Not because she wished it upon other people, but because this was the way of her father. He treated her horribly, leaving her for sometimes days or weeks at a time to defend herself. He had even watched once as the ice from one of the frozen rivers had collapsed beneath her feet and she had fallen in almost drowning as he watched uncaring. The only reason he was here at all was because her mother had recently passed. Her father found his amusement in tormenting her, attacking her, preparing traps. One had broken clean through her right front leg, the scar can still be seen today. She began to vent her frustrations on others, tricking even the other Lumen, deceiving them. The older she got the more bold she got sometimes sending pups off on their own and sometimes even tricking the others into a raging river. One fateful day her father returned from a longer journey and Eve managed to deceive even him luring him into the woods were he fell into her trap. She attacked him from the rear her teeth finding purchase in his soft jugular as she ripped the vein from his body. He had fallen, realizing he was dying he glared up at her with hatred gleaming in his eyes. "You are the Trickster. The one that will cause ruin and destruction." He had wheezed and she had grinned like the she devil she was. With his final breaths he had bestowed upon her, her true name. Loki. The eternal trickster. She left her birthplace remaining visible. She did not care for the ways of the Lumen and because she did not attempt to hide herself most did not pin her down as Lumen, those that did realize what she was, she reluctantly allowed them their wish before painting beautiful images with the words she used, more often than not, causing great peril to befall whoever she came across. She wanders aimlessly, feeding off of the energies of whatever poor and sorry creatures she happens to come across and leaving nothing but a wake of pain, misery and loss in her wake. Her cruelty knows no limits and her deceptions and lies have no bounds, she does what she wants to whoever she wants. She has no thoughts of self preservation and thats what makes her so dangerous.
Other: Nothing comes to mind ^^

[Somatra]

Hello Loki and a huge welcome to Wonderwhy, so very glad you joined!

My name is Somatra and I get the pleasure of reviewing your bio today so hopefully we can get you out there and rp-ing before long! Let`s get this show on the road then...

So your appearance looks fine in terms of grammar and spelling, which is wonderful to see, however the profile forms states a 150 word minimum word count for appearance and you currently only have 111. In consequence could you please elaborate a bit in order to fully develop this great character?

Your strengths and weaknesses are great so far! I would like to see you add another strength and weakness and perhaps state them in list format for ease of organization please. Other wise they are fine.

Deceitful and angry she has led more than her fair share of wolves to there (their) deaths by twisting her words into great elaborate tales.

She hadn't always been so cold hearted (, and) as a child she had been playful and curious and full of amazement at her own abilities, but as she grew older her soul grew darker, as did the colors of her coat, it slowly tuned darker and darker until the ebony color you see today stands dominant.

So far so great with your personality, just need to elaborate some more to meet the word limit of 150 and to help character development.

She like the rest of the pups were taught the ways of the Lumen, colorful, wonderful stories rich with there heritage and there (their) ability to grant wishes.

She did not care for the ways of the Lumen and because she did not attempt to hide herself most did not pin her down as Lumen, those that did realize what she was, she reluctantly allowed them there (their) wish before painting beautiful images with the words she used, more often than not, causing great peril to befall whoever she came across.

Alright, so other than a couple spellings issues this is a grand history and certainly explains her personality. So just fix up those couple things and reply to this thread to let me know when you are done and I will gladly review the bio again and see if all is well!
Good luck,

--Som

[loki]

I believe I fixed everything, and I'm glad the errors were few ^^

[Somatra]

Excellent! So just a few more spelling errors to check over, nothing major at all, and then she should be good to go. I am prone to such errors (especially typos) so I like to run my stuff through Microsoft Word before posting, but no post is ever perfect and even this trick is not fool proof.

Despite her ability to manipulate the light, she prefers to remain ebony in color, it matches her personality and creates a much more intimidating appearence.

She moves silently, and she had perfected the art of the stalk and can move without a sound for long periods of time, she had remarkable endurance and when focused, she can survive without food or drink for several days, especially in territories shes (she's) familiar in.

Strengths and weaknesses look nicely balanced, I like how you listed to lie as a strength, it is a neat twist and point of view!

Deceitful and angry she has led more than her fair share of wolves to there (their) deaths by twisting her words into great elaborate tales.

Alright, so apart from those this is a lovely bio, just fix those things up and let me know when you are done. Would love to have a thread with Loki and Scorch, or even one with Caesar or Daedalus depending on your interest. Their bios are under my staff name on the side of the site. Also, should you desire a table for this character to post with, please feel more then welcome to post a request in my art thread entitled Som's Treasor Chest of Art, I do them completely free so no sweat!

--Som

[loki]

Both errors are fixed and I would love to be in an RP with Scorch, just let me know where to post and I would be delighted ^^ Before I post in your thread I'll make sure shes approved before I request a table!

[Somatra]

Awesome! Perhaps this weekend or come Monday I will have a thread up for them and thanks very much for choosing Wonderwhy, you are good to join this fabulous and imaginative world, congrats!