Cerberus- Lyxxus- DONE AND UPDATED

[Cerberus]

OOC Information
OOC Name:jdiger101
Link to Previous Character: None

General
Name: Cerberus
Alias: Rust
Species: Lyxxus
Gender: Male
Age: One and a half years old
Pack: Loner
Rank: n/a

Physical
Height: 20 inches
Weight: 35 pounds
Appearance: His fairly short fur is an orange rust color all completely covering his body. The only places on his body that aren't orange rust are his ear tips and tail tip. His tail tip is black along with his ear tips. The orange rust color of his fur blends smoothly into the black tips starting at the base of the ears and tail. His tail has not split yet but his tail is long and wide for a lyxxus.
Others say his eyes are ice blue. They look like a cloud with a little bit of blue shining through. His all over build is very muscley and big. . . for a lyxxus anyway. . . His ears are long and pointy even for a lyxxus. His legs are long and graceful and his muzzle is long and flat at the end. His whiskers are slightly too long compared to the size of his head.
Other: Nothing.
Mental
Strengths:
Agility- He is quick and graceful. He is very smooth in his movements.
Night Vision- He can see at night as if it were day time.
Friendly- He goes out of his way to help others and hates having enemies.
Strong- He is very strong but prefers not to use his strength.
Quick wits- He is incredibly smart and good at using his wits.
Weaknesses:
Over Confidence- Because of his wits and strength he thinks he can do anything sometimes.
Hates Water- He knows how to swim and doesn't mind swimming but he hates the water itself.
Sleep Walking- Sometimes he gets himself in trouble during the night unconsciously.
Short Attention Span- He gets bored of things quickly and always needs something new to do.
Stubborn- Once he starts something he is going to finish it.
Personality: Despite his tough appearance he is a softie at heart. He cares about other's feelings and tries to help people often. Every now and then every one has off-days and he is no exception. On these rare occasions Cerberus isn't willing to help anyone. He will sometimes try to avoid wolves when he isn't feeling friendly. on his good days, which are most of his days, he is friendly and supportive to everyone other than his enemies. He only fights others if necessary . He doesn't try to fight at all if he can, he will always try to talk it out first. He tries not to make enemies at all but every one has enemies whether they want them or not. If his enemies try to fight him he still won't fight until necessary for him. When he is challenged verbally he is quick to find a comeback. He is good with words and knows how to use them properly. Most creatures like him and say he is fun to be around.
History: On a normal warm summer day he was born in a litter of seven, normal for a lyxxus litter. He was the runt of his litter despite his large size. His siblings were massive. His parents abandoned him and left him to die in the forest they lived in. He was lucky to survive in the two days it took for the pack of wolves to find him. The wolf pack took in Cerberus and gave him his name. They taught him what he needed to know to survive and took care of him until he was old enough to take care of himself. He wandered through the forest for a while, searching for his parent with the pack's help. He searched day after day for his parents and siblings until eventually one day during his search he got to the edge of the forest.There was a desert and at the edge of the desert was a collapsed eremus in the sand. He dragged the female eremus to the forest and collected food for her once she woke up. He didn't stay long enough to watch her wake up though. He went on the search for his family again. After a half-year of searching, he finally found his family. . .'s corpses. After he became about one and a half he decided to leave the pack and set off himself.
Other: Nothing.

Note: The picture has two tails but he only has one right now.
Note: The eremus in his history is Crystal, I know her in real life and we planned to do role playing about that. Link to her bio: www.wonderwhywolves.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=eremus&action=display&thread=13662&page=1

[crow]

Okay so let me make a checklist, you meet all the word counts.. you have the required amount of strengths and weaknesses... age and species looks good. Now to address any typos and such..

first off, his age needs to match his tails. Since he is a lyxxus he should be either almost two or two years or older, no exceptions. And no species of wolf (except for the lumen here on wonderwhy) have all the colors reflected on their fur. So you will need to fix and remove or reword that. And wolves don't glow at all, unless they are part of the sono nyx and wear festive nyx paste on their body.

for strengths and weaknesses, all i see needing work is the last weakness which i think fits better as stubborn not obsessive.

looks like you need to run a grammer and spell check over this too for personality and history.

Also a wolf cant live on his own without a guardian unless a year and a half and your history states he was a year old when he left his pack. He should be at least a year and a half to be on his own. And maybe explain the importance of the eremus he found in the sand on the edge of the desert? Most eremus are desert dwellers, so it wouldn't be often they collapse.

Other then that it looks fine, make the necessary changes and post you've updated the bio then I'll come back and let you know if it's accepted or if I need you to fix anything else C:

[Cerberus]

I think I fixed it. I ran the Personality and History through a grammar check though so I hope that's okay.